Audience and Industry essay LR

Audience essay feedback:

WWW:

• You’ve written over 800 words and covered the three industries impressively – well done!
• You’ve clearly picked out some key points from the lessons and notes such as streaming and audience consumption habits (‘binge watching’).
• You’ve offered an excellent conclusion that covers both sides of the debate and clearly states an opinion on the question. This is a really good sign.

EBI:

• You’ve clearly researched this essay online which is a hugely positive thing – the internet is an amazing resource and incredibly useful when you want to learn about a new topic. However, you need to make sure your research doesn’t become plagiarism.
• You cannot copy and paste chunks of text unless you put it in a “quotation” and say where you have got this from. Otherwise, this is called plagiarism and if you wish to study at A Level or at university then you need to learn this vital lesson. At university, you will be thrown out for plagiarising an essay. Changing a word or two here and there is not enough (as you have done with this essay).
• Despite this, you’ve clearly learned a lot from this exercise and still deserve a lot of credit for compiling such a strong argument.

LR

Q1) 1724

Q2) My concluding paragraph because it summarises my essay in to a few sentences

Q3) NONE

Q4) Use less plagiarism

Q5) Technology has given audience the power as they can give a media product more or less profit